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Ok now I know the grammar and everything isnt that great. But my delema is that I feel the story is missing something, but I dont know what. Can you help me out?


My name is Gabriel Stone, and today is the day I die. But I suppose I am getting a head of myself. Ironically I was born with the power of the angel of death. Not something I am exactly proud of, but true. Today while I was sitting in math class God sent me a vision of my death and told me it was to happen later today, and that I must go, “for it is my destiny.” Well that is the excuse he gave me, I just figured I should go along with it since he was kind enough to tell me when it was I was going to die. I guess it is a good thing because lately I have grown sick of this world and the people in it. There isn’t exactly a reason, I mean I have a family that loves me, I am a straight A student, I am popular, and I am a record holding athlete. I have just grown sick of it. So I have come to a resolve; if I am going to die I am going to take a few people with me.

Well let’s see here where should I start? I guess right after I got that vision. Needless to say I was a bit pissed off. Yes I may have over reacted I mean the nerd next to me didn’t deserve to get punched in the face, but thanks to him I came up with my idea to take people with me. So I decided instead of going to the main office I would walk around school and find those that truly pissed me off. When I found them I walked up to them and punched them in the chest on the side of their hearts. I believe this was the first time I think I have ever been thankful for my powers, I mean with out them I would be difficult to kill all those in the world that have done wrong. I planted I tiny explosive made of pure energy right next to there hearts. It went in through their skin and rested right next to their hearts. They would detonate as soon as my life force was gone from this world. Finally I had caused enough of a commotion and got basically the whole school outside so they could see me on my final journey. These people also made me sick but they didn’t deserve to die, well not all of them at least. I was there hero a god among them, well for once I was going to be myself I was going to show them what I truly was and I was going to see what they truly thought of me. Finally when I got the last kid in the chest I turned and smiled to the group. It was pretty obvious they had no idea what the hell was going on. “Well good-bye” I said simply as I turned and got down on all fours. Again I got looks of insanity.

“Gabriel, what are you doing?” A girl asked me, she sounded so concerned for me. This girl’s name was Gale. I must say I will miss seeing her sweet and innocent face. She was in fact one of the very few people I didn’t wish was dead.

My reply was simple and short. “To kill, and to die.” and with that I began to yell as the ground around me began to crack. This black aura began to form around me. It distorted my appearance, and soon I was gone leaving the ground in ruins. For a second or two I took of on all fours then I slowly began to stand up right, and that is when my power kicked in. Soon the world was at a stand still. I had all the time in the world to find and kill those that pissed me off. It didn’t take me long to finish the united states I walked up to people in stores those that were evil. That was another one of my demonic angel powers, I could tell a good person from the bad. It wasn’t like I was just picking people by they way they looked, man that would be idiotic. I went to jails and well every fucking place I could find a soul. So my next stop was across the seas. So I got to them as well. All in all it took me several years, well I guess about a hundred to be exact. Or ten minutes, I mean it is the same thing when using this power. I have to be honest this is the first time using it, and again to be honest I liked it. The adrenaline and the ability, the freedom of it all, it was like sex for a power addict. But before it was my time to die, I still had things to do. Say good-bye to my family and well I guess Gale. So that is when I headed home. Once I got there my family looked at me as though I was a freak and well could you really blame them. I mean come on I just picked a fight with over fifty people and then tore up the street when I took off. I looked at them and smiled. “Well thanks for the life, and well take care.” I said to them as I turned and walked out for the last time. I must say it was heart braking but when people look at you as though you are the harbinger of death you get over it. They were completely correct but it still hurt nonetheless. I left them for good and then walked to Gale’s house. This time I actually walked none of my power movement stuff, I wanted to saver the last bit of life while I had it. So when I got there she was the only person home. I let myself in, which was a horrible idea. She hit me in the head with a shovel. Now I have no idea why the hell she had a shovel in the house but she did and it fucking hurt. I looked up at her after she did this and simply said. “Ow.” She tried to hit me gain but I caught it this time and pried it out of her hands. Why was I here to see this bitch again, oh wait that’s right, I love her. “I came to say good bye... I mean honestly did he have to hit me with the shovel?” I said as I rubbed my head and threw the shovel to the end of the hall and blocked it off so she couldn’t get to it.

She just started at me and I couldn’t tell what she was thinking. “Gabriel...” she started “What are you?” She asked plainly.

“I am the angel of death reincarnated in this human form.” I told her as if it was common. “And I came to say good by to the women I love.” I told her as I moved in closer. She backed up and as she did I heard a special news bulletin that just came on.

“I am sorry to report that the missile silos all across the world have gone off sending missiles flying in all directions, this looks as if it is the end of the world.” The reporter said.

This is were I started telling my story. This moment after seeing that news report. My name is Gabriel Stone and today is the day I die. I smiled and bowed to Gale. “My time has come.” I then walked out her door and to the street. Once gain I began to yell as the black aura came back. This time it began to form all around my body. Black wings sprouted out of my back, talons on my fingers and fangs in my mouth. My hair grew long and black. I then gave one final look to Gale. I gave her a newly sharp tooth grin, and then took off. I flew across the skies destroying bombs left and right. I lit up the sky as things exploded.

From the sky I could here another news report, “It appears there is something in the sky that is going to save us. We are out of danger.” This new reporter said allowed across the world. If only these people knew what I was giving up. They think I am immortal, just like humans to assume that they deserve to live. Finally came my death four atomic missiles were going to join up at one spot and this is were I was to meat my end. They showed up right on time and I began to destroy them. Once the four detonated they began to disintegrate my body. I then began to change back to normal. The power wiped away my wings then my legs as it worked its way up my body. I couldn’t help but smile as screams from the earth could be heard as people began to drop left and right. On the autopsy it would be seen as there insides had been blown up. Finally it worked its way up to my head. I then began to laugh but not for long soon I was consumed up to my eyes. This last bit seemed to be and out of body experience as if I was watching my own demise. It then consumed my left eye and my right eye changed it turned black with the center a neon blue and a tint of gold in the iris. Then it vanished, as did I from this world forever.